User blog comment:Vinnnn/Character Critiques, Tips, and Hints/@comment-3991308-20150615114556/@comment-33209858-20150615122635

I'm more than happy to look over the twins for you! And thank you for your kind words! ^^ I'm glad you find my reviews/critiques to be helpful~

First of all, their personalities are so vastly different from each other, it's brilliant! When most people write twins, they write them like "so close they're telekinetically connected" or something to that degree, but I like how you gave them their own personalities separate from each other. I know two sets of twins IRL - And each twin is different from their sibling, so I feel like having twins who are two entirely different people is very much realistic!

I'm fond of Radiant's bitter attitude - I especially like that you gave her a reason to be bitter (ie. feeling restricted). I love it when backstory gets incoporated into a character's personality, as backstory effects people's personalities in real life as well. I'd say to expand more on her character though - There has to be more to her rather bitter, critical Radiant. I'd like to see some focus on positive aspects of her; Perhaps she's creative, or sensitive or intelligent and observant or athletic (I noticed you mention she liked unicorn polo and I thought that was an adorable touch!)

Also, I'd love to see more expanded on her relationship with her parents! Because on her page, it feels as if she has a more strained relationship with her parents, but on Rennard's page (maybe because it's his perspective) it seems as if Radiant has a close relationship to her parents and is like their "golden child". So, I'd like to see how their dynamic works and possibly how it affects not only Radiant as a character, but also her relationship with her twin brother.

I love how Rennard's personality contrasts his sister's. I also like how he appears confident, but really isn't. I feel like Ren has a very good set of good traits and flaws, and they are both equally present in his personality. Like I said before, though, I'd like to see more expanded on his relationship with his parents as well as his sister. Oh, and I'd like to see more on his insecurities - how he deals with it, how it effects him, etc. etc. Because I love super confident characters that are actually super self-conscious - It just adds more depth to their personality, y'know? You could even expand more on his other traits. For exmaple: He's flirtatious, but does he usually get with other people or do his flirting attempts fail? He wants to make his family proud of him, so how does he go about doing that and does it work? If not, how does it effect him?

So far, I love the twins! They're interesting and have great personalities so far! And I can't wait to see more of them~ If you need any help or if you'd like me to review another character, feel free to ask ^^