Thread:IdioticPerfectionist/@comment-24579399-20140819215851

~ this is the critique that I mentioned in your blog post. Please enjoy, and note that Nazo is a great character that I love.

~ It's totally great that she has secrets. Everyone does. But what kind of secrets? Does she eat soap? It might give us a better idea of the character if we knew if she was a weirdo behind the fan or a ninja who accidentally broke a lot of things.

~ What is it like when people try to interact with her? I'm sure that the Apples and Briars all want to meet and get to know everyone, and a princess like her, they might want to know what's up with her and her fan. When they come, how does she ward them away?

~ What is her life like at home and how does it affect her? We don't really have a reason that she hides behind a fan. Why isn't she constantly gawking over earth stuff (I was under the impression that she spends most of the summers and such on the moon, might be wrong)

~ Sure being a ninja sounds cool and helps people, but what is the further reason to go forward with this dream? What would she do to continue and insure this dream?

~ That's it, thank you for your time in reading! 