User blog comment:Vinnnn/Character Critiques, Tips, and Hints/@comment-26208189-20150723135156/@comment-33209858-20150727062633

Hey there, I'm more than happy to critique these two for you~ I'll start with Porri:

Looking over her personality, I do like how she's sweet and bubbly, but I'd like to see more expanded on her flaws. Because really the only flaw(s) I could find were the ones where she gets cranky and angry when she doesn't eat enough. I'd like to see more on that! I'd also like to see more of her gluttonous attitude. For example, does it only apply to food or can she be gluttonous about other things?

Also, I feel like her character is centered just around eating food. But is there more to her? Any other interests or hobbies she has? I noticed that under her Quote section, Porri was a judge for a Cooking Contest. Does she do that often? Is she hard to please like Blondie? etc. etc.

I do like her overall personality as well as her appearance! But I'd like to see more expanded on her than just being a sweet, gluttonous girl who likes to eat. Other than that, Porri looks pretty good as a character~

And now onto my review for Queenie:

I do like her personality and how she's misunderstood because of the language barrier. I'd like to see more on her actual traits, though. We know that she's misunderstood, but what's the real Queenie like? I noticed you mentioned she was a bit of blabbermouth and that she's actually sweet and kind, according to her friend, so more on that would be great!

Something I'd like to see is how Queenie is dealing with being in a whole new country and surrounded by people she can't even understand. Is she scared or nervous or excited or curious? Does she ever miss her parents back home? If so, does she ever try to contact them? And she she can't speak English, is she solely dependent on her translator? Is she trying to learn English? And are they in all the same classes together since Queenie wouldn't be able to understand anything if she didn't have her translator?

I do like the idea of a fairytale from a different country attending Ever After High, but since it's an English-speaking school, it would be hard for them to learn anything, which is what the point of school is about. I mean, even in Queenie's infobox it says under her Favorite/Least Favorite Subjects that she can't understand anything. I don't know, I feel like she would at least have learned some English before being even accepted into an English-speaking school. Otherwise, what would be the point of her going there to learn if she couldn't learn in the first place? I think that's the biggest thing that confused me about her

Overall, though, I do like the idea behind Queenie, and I think she has potential for being a very interesting character. I'd just like to see some more things about her! Otherwise though, she's a very cute character and I especially love her design!

Well, that's all I have to say for now~ Hopefully this critique was helpful, and if you'd like me to review something else of yours, I'd be more than happy to help C: