Talk:Jacqueline Tempest/@comment-24550396-20140809210453

Okay, so you asked me to do a critique on Jabby, and here it is.


 * I've read through her profile for the seemingly millionth time, and yet again, I really cannot make a comment, it is well rounded and she has flaws to balance out her personality and avoid the annoying title of a "Mary-Sue". She is provided with a lot of information which is pretty interesting to read, however, with a little bit of expanding, I'm sure a good profile can become a great one.


 * I really like how she appears to take physical features from other animals, it's unique and pretty darn cute. (Also she reminds me of a homestuck troll which as much as it is irreverent, is actually really cool)

I don't actually know if can add a further comment as she probably only needs some further developement and expansion on. So um yeah!

~Floats away~