User blog comment:Vinnnn/Character Critiques, Tips, and Hints/@comment-3991308-20150529072414/@comment-33209858-20150529081501

Eep I feel so honored to critique your characters, especially since Avian's one of my favorites~ With that said, I'll start with him!

I think what I like most about Avian is his personality. His personality makes sense, and none of his traits contradict each other. He's very realistic and relatable - I especially related to him a lot when he sort of broke down and started yelling at his cousin and Lea in his diary. It's totally something I would do if I was put in a situation like that.

There's not much I can say that's negative about him. I mean, his personality is well-written, his backstory is expanded upon and even his relationships are expanded upon as well. Icarus is very much the same way. You've certainly covered all your bases with both of these OCs, so props to you for that~

Although, with Icarus, I think I'd like to see more about his coping skills with his death. I know you mentioned something in the Dead Epics thread before, but perhaps you could add that somewhere in his profile. And are there any sort of awkward feelings between Icarus and Avian when destiny is brought up? Or do they sort of laugh it off and awkwardly shove it to the side for another time? Mostly I'm just nitpicking because your OCs are pretty darn good~

And if you need help developing your characters, I'd suggest writing a fanfiction with them. It doesn't have to be super long (like I plan to have Dancing with Destiny), but even just like six chapters of character development helps to get the engine started (metaphorically speaking). Hex, it doesn't even have to be something big or dramatic - Maybe just Avian and Icarus out looking for jobs, or being snowed in, or going to the movies and finding out that the tickets were sold out. Everyday tasks like that are actually surprisingly fun to write about, especially when your writing about your character - And who knows, you might discover something new about them along the way~

Something that I do to develop my character is actually picture them in canon. So, like, I've pictured how Minuette would react to the Legacy Day and Spring Unsprung events. In doing so, it not only helps me write my character but it helps me expand on them in ways that I hadn't thought about before~

Hopefully my advice helped in some way! If not, feel free to ask again and I'll try and be more specific~