User blog comment:Vinnnn/Character Critiques, Tips, and Hints/@comment-27235572-20150719003633/@comment-33209858-20150720044211

Hey there~ I'd be more than happy to review Quinn for you!

So, overall I'm really liking her so far. I like her personality and how different it is from her father's from the story. Something I noticed was that some of Quinn's traits seemed to more or less contradict her shy, sweet personality - For example, her being able to apparently judo-flip Daring Charming and swearing at Duchess in German. To me, that's not sweet or shy, which seemed to be Quinn's most noticeable traits. I do think that it's possible for a shy, kind person to do such things if they had like a "breaking point" or something, but otherwise it's quite contradictory. Perhaps you could add in somewhere that point where Quinn will sort of lash out, so that it manages to tie in with her overall personality

I enjoyed reading all through her relationships, and they seemed realistic enough. The dynamic between her and her parents, specifcally her father, is pretty interesting even if it is pretty messed up with the whole "hiring someone to kidnap you child" thing. I also like her quotes you added about each person - It was a small but insightful look into Quinn's point of view and her overall character

Overall, I enjoyed reading through her profile, and she's a pretty well-written character with a good set of positive traits and flaws, as well as realistic hobbies and interests. Although I did think that her judo-flipping Daring and swearing out Duchess was a bit contradictory for a shy, cowardly and sweet character, Quinn is still very adorable and I look forward to seeing more of her!

And as for describing outfits, what I usually do is start with the overall design. For example, if my OC is wearing a dress I describe what the dress looks likes (ie. "Example wears a form-fitting, halter-top pink dress"). When I do so, I take in consider the neckline type, how it fits the body, what color it is, and if it has any sleeves, etc. etc. And then I go on to describing the details of the dress (ie. "The dress has white ruffles along the top and bottom, along with a light pink lace overlay with a faint white floral pattern on it."). Lastly I describe the accessories (ie. "Example's accessories include nude polka-dot tights, hot pink high heels with light pink bows on the side, a chunky silver floral necklace, and a silver pearl bracelet").

That's how I normally go about describing outfits ^^ Hopefully I explained it in a way that makes sense, otherwise I'd be more than happy to clarify again!

And if you'd like me to critique something else or if you need any other sort of help, just let me know and I'll try my best C: