Thread:Cherryki/@comment-7026120-20140327190333/@comment-7026120-20140330095501

Oh my, Frosty. This is more and better than I ever could ask for. Thank you so much, I owe you! This is perfect!

You couldn't sound too snobbish at all, I asked you to be honest and honestly I could really work on my conjugations. And as for the odd verbs... Let's just say that english isn't the only language where I occasionally throw them in...

I bow down to your superiority! I will definitely keep all of this in mind not only when I fix the old part but when I write in the future! And I will try to limit my Disney references and all of the safe cliéches I tend to cling on to.

I notice when I write that I put Isabella through much more adversity than I'd planned for her to. But I just want to push her into trying to take control over her own life and when the tables turn soon I think her persona (and others) will be more noticeable.

In the scene with Elian I remember first planning for it to be longer but I got lazy so I think that more really could be added there. But I now that I want him to make the Rebel side in Isabella more visible.

I guess I have some cleanups to do now... ^^