User blog comment:SabineOfTheForce/Chapter 1 of Raven and Her ghost/@comment-26208189-20150513234944

I have much critique about this.


 * First of all, when you make a fanfic, you best make a page about it and not a User Blog.


 * Second: Grammar.


 * Third: I know your new, but this whole blurb of writing doesn't really catch my eye very well.