User blog comment:Vinnnn/Character Critiques, Tips, and Hints/@comment-26461452-20150530212436/@comment-33209858-20150531144848

Okay, so A Fang Out of a Place is looking very good so far. I think you've really managed to capture Faybelle's personality pretty well, and I also enjoy the little backstory of being childhood friends with Axel and Faybelle - It gives a little more depth to their characters.

I think the most prominent thing to look out for is grammar and spelling. I'd suggest writing it first in Microsoft Word, because that comes with instant spell-check. It's not a huge deal, it's just something to consider since everybody loves a good fanfiction with good grammar and good spelling~

There's only two chapters out so far, so I can't really say much about it. I like the direction it's going in, though. The possibility of a break-up could be something very interesting to write about. Especially since Faybelle is one of those girls who will go seeking revenge~

I'm very excited to see how a Fang Out of Place turns out~

Now, onto Vadim!

The first thing I noticed is that in the first few sentences, he's called "the daughter of Von Rothbart". I'm just going to assume that's a typo (if not, correct me so).

There's not much on his personality, so perhaps you could expand a tad bit. I like his character a lot though - He seems very 'villainous' but at the same time he doesn't want to be a villain. Oh, and his appearance is very nice as well~ I especially love how he looks like an owl. You write his appearance with very good imagery!

Like I said, I'd like to see more of his personality. Maybe add his hobbies and interests or his habits (either good or bad). Maybe even give him a guilty pleasure. I'd also love to see some Trivia and Notes on him (I'm particularly interested in where the name Vadim comes from). Oh, and like I said with a Fang Out of Place, the biggest thing to watch for is grammar and spelling~

Vadim's not a bad character at all - He just needs a bit more to really make him stand out. I know that he's still a new OC, so that's why I'm very excited to see how he grows and develops in the future!

If you need any more help or advice, just go right ahead and ask~