User blog comment:Vinnnn/Character Critiques, Tips, and Hints/@comment-26208189-20150718042110/@comment-33209858-20150718224405

Hey there! I'm more than happy to review your little ficlets, as well as come up with some ideas for Portia. With that said, I'll start with my critique~

As much as I love fanfictions with long, novella-like chapters, I also really enjoyed reading your one-shots. Despite being rather short, I felt like they were nicely paced and each storyline really fit in with each character they were about. I especially enjoyed reading about some of your other OCs like Tricksie and Tailor, as well as Sophaea and Frances. I'm quite excited to see more of Lana and Lance, and especially their dynamic. They sort of take the whole 'sibling rivalry' thing and really run with it, since they purposefully meant to harm each other.

Something I noticed was that most of the stories were very dialogue-driven. I'm not saying that's a bad thing, of course, and I do like how you managed to keep the story going despite not having oodles of description here and there. In fact, my favorite of the one-shots was Riley's, since it was written in her point of view.

I also did notice a few grammar and spelling errors here and there, but of course typos are natural. There were very few so it didn't bother me, but if you'd like you can always go back and spell-check. But overall, I did really enjoy them. I'd like to see more relationship dynamics or more character-building stories, but if you continue to write more slice-of-life ficlets, that's perfectly fine as well!

As for Portia's new design and appearance, I do have a couple of ideas:

The first is a cerulean blue and pink theme. Her hair color could go a variety of ways: blonde, strawberry blonde, dark/light brown, or even auburn red. For her design, you could always give her a 17th century French high-class lady couture with some musketeer twists here and there, such as adding a cape and boots and a hat.

I'm also fond of the idea of giving her a magenta and gold color scheme. It's richer and bolder than blue and pink, but I like it nonetheless. And if the 17th century theme idea doesn't sit well with you, you could always give her more of a feminine musketeer attire with like the poofy sleeves and cape. As for motifs, I'd say crosses, since that's the ensignia most commonly associated with the musketeers.

Oh, and I do like spring green and pink as a color scheme, too. Particularly with either light ginger hair and green/brown eyes or even blonde hair with green/blue eyes. I guess it all just depends on what sort of colors you think go best with Portia in the end~

That's all the ideas I have for now! If none of these ideas tickle your fancy, just let me know and I'll try again! And if you need any more advice or ideas, I'm more than happy to help C: