User blog comment:ARCUSTHEGODDESSOFRAINBOWS/The Wonderful Arcus of Oz's Lamp/@comment-24579399-20140310190107/@comment-8267955-20140312043856

for Duck Girl, Let me ask you this... ''Why is she a rebel even if she gets a happily ever after? Why is she so scared when her story doesn't have some kind of horrible fate?'' The bad thing that happens to her is that somebody would impersonate her. I suggest that it would be best if you made her a Royal rather than Rebel since it wouldn't make much sense for her to be a rebel if she doesn't have something that drives her to be against her destiny. Duck's page also needs to be cleaned up. and might I suggest that her page name be changed to her real name even though most people call her "Duck" or perhaps rename as "Celle "Duck" Goosefeather". The page needs to be expounded more. Explain her a little further in the page.

for Jacque Bean, please write about him more. You can't just explain him in two sentences. Why not make him scared of heights? What about you can make him an arrogant little turd who thinks he can slay even the mightiest of creatures? I want to see more personality in him.. What makes him tick? What makes him tock?

Linda Goodwitch, FINALLY A REBELLIOUS DAUGHTER OF GLINDA. I love her concep about her being a sarcastic know-it-all but what I want to know why? Why is she like that? Why does she want to rebel against being Glinda the Good?

For Aleta Dance, I like her being assertive (bossy is not a good word to teach younger kids). Motherly instinct is also a good touch to her but I want to see more personality from her. How does she act when her siblings aren't around? Is she a wild child? Does she party in the Red Shoe club against her parent's wishes? I want to see more of her.

Technically, the one thing I wanna see most are your characters personalities and I really hope that my advice could help you in making them better. Have a very nice day :)