User blog comment:Vinnnn/Character Critiques, Tips, and Hints/@comment-25996646-20150705084503/@comment-33209858-20150710034655

Ahhh my apologies for taking so long to reply! I'm more than happy to review both of your OCs for you, of course~ I'll start with Ivan:

I love, love, love Ivan's personality! eep a lil parakeet bby It's a little on the short side, but I think you managed to convey his character very well for two paragraphs. Still, feel free to talk more about his personality. Or, you could even add in his hobbies and interests somewhere! The Adarna bird's thing is singing, and from what I can gather from his infobox is that he generally likes singing? And he and his father seem to bond over art. What kind of art? If Ivan is artistic, I'd love to see you add more on that!

Something I'd like to see more on is his relationship with his sister. Specifcally, her, him and their destiny. So far, neither of them have been chosen to be the next birb. Does this ever spawn any sort of discontent between the two? Do they ever talk about it? If so, how do they handle it? Siblings in EAH interest me greatly, because from what we can tell, only one can actually have the destiny. So, what happens to the other sibling then? Really, I'd just like to see your take on it and how you write it out ^^

Okay, so long story short Ivan is adorable and I love him~

And now it's time for Hadrian's review:

I really like how you've made him a dolphin merman. Super cute! And I love his hair color(s). Peach and teal ombre is now my jam! C: But enough about aethestics!

So, I like his personality. "Go with the flow" fits the child of the Little Mermaid! But I feel like there's not much else stated about his personality. I mean, he's chill and he likes to party, but what else? What other quirks or habits or hobbies does he have? And what other personality traits does he have? Is he intelligent? Unemotional? Sarcastic? I'd suggest giving him more depth to his character than just being a chill party-goer

Oh, and how does Haddy feel about his destiny? His story doesn't end happily, so how does he feel about it? And how does his family feel about it? He's apparently close with his family, so how do they feel about him having to eventually die one day for the sake of a story? Pretty dark stuff, man.

Overall, I'm really liking Hadrian! He's fun and interesting already, but defenitely feel free to give his character some more depth! And I'm excited to see more of him in the future~ If you need any advice or if you'd like me to review another character of yours, just let me know and I'll be happy to help ^^