User blog comment:EtherealNyx/Advice With Nyx *OPEN NOW*/@comment-3991308-20150830075639/@comment-27235572-20150830140210

Oh, thank you! ^_^ Sorry that I didn't see this sooner!

Anyways, I took a quick overview on Miraspella, just to get familiarized with the type of person she is. First of all, kudos to you for picking the fairytale Brother And Sister, otherwise known as The Enchanted Stag. I've loved that tale for a long time, so it's exciting to get some representation in the Wiki.

Now, on to the personality and appearance. While she is ultimately a very well-written character, I'd have to say that I find some parts of her when in conjunction with the last paragraph of her personality to be contradictory.

For example, "Dedicated and diligent, Miraspella will do anything to succeed", "Miraspella is very much a devious soul" and "practical jokes and crafty plots are always something up her alley" don't sound well with "Miraspella is someone you should cross" and "You’re playing with someone who loses with dignity".

Also, another small thing I found to be contradictory was "Even though she wants a quiet life over a fancy castle, Miraspella wants to be known, recognised and lauded with praise." I found something wrong with this sentence because ultimately in life, if you're famous and can actually afford a castle, then you're probably not getting a quiet life like you want (unless she becomes a recluse). But, otherwise, this is a very well-written personality.

On the appearance, I think it's mainly fine... except for the part about the striking eyes. Is the other, uncovered eye striking? If not, the word probably shouldn't be used to describe her. Perhaps, you can say that her eyes were once the most striking thing about her, before the incident that got it cut out.

Moving right along...

I would like to see more in the mother section (their interactions, if Miraspella is treated right, what caused the missing eye). That way, it would likely provide the motive for Miraspella's personality. Maybe her mother laments about her appearance and wishes she had found someone handsome to marry so that her daughter wouldn't be 'homely' or whatever. Maybe, her eye was cut out by her mother because of jealousy over how striking it was!

I like her Friends section, neat and concise.

For the Pet section, can I see some more information? Like, why did she name her owl that? What does it mean? How does she interact with it? Just little details that can flesh her out even more.

And, maybe instead of everyone for her enemies, maybe list the traits she abhors? Or that she finds unseemly in a person?

For the Outfits, I'm not exactly sure what her personal style is, but maybe writing just a little paragraph before you get into the whole listing thing would help people if they want to draw her in something a little different than the sketch shown.

I think that's all I can say on here besides looking forward to the TBA tidbits. So, I'd just like to say that you have an amazing character and I hope this helps you!