User blog comment:Vinnnn/Character Critiques, Tips, and Hints/@comment-5904313-20150530214013/@comment-33209858-20150531151003

Alrighty, we'll start with Aislin Lukøje!

First of all, her appearance is adorable! She has a cute color scheme and her hair is so colorful and pretty~

I like her personality as well. Bubbly characters are great, aren't they? But I also like how you've managed to balance out her character with flaws, such as her being egocentric and forgetting other's people's feeling, and being oblivious. They're all very nice flaws, and super fun to write with! Oh, and I like how you added that she's a Rebel because she "wants to dream" - That's adorbs~

I think it's interesting how you split the Personality section and add her Interest and Hobbies in another. Normally I'd say to just sort of add the two together, since interests and hobbies can easily be worked into the personality.

A few things I'd like to see more is her relationships - whether it be with her parents, her friends, her pet, etc. I'd sort of like to see how she feels about them and how she interacts with them. For example, do her parents know she's a Rebel? And how do they feel about it? Or does she want to keep it a secret from them? I'd also like to see her profile more EAH lingo-fied. Add in a few "spelltaculars" or "Wonderlandifuls", just to make it seem a bit more EAH-ish, y'know? Maybe a Notes section where you can explain the reasoning and meanings behind her name. Also, a very minor thing, but could you add why she likes her Favorite Subject and dislikes her Least Favorite Subject in her infobox? Just to add a bit more to her character~

So, Aislin is an adorable character! She's bright and cute, and her love her "keeping dreaming" motif - I think it's very fitting of the daughter of the Sandman~

And now onto Damaris Cicero :D

I really enjoy how all of your characters are written. I especially love how all of your characters are so different from each other - They don't have the same personality or looks or anything. And I think that's very great! It's good to branch out~

I love her personality - You don't see too many dark and brooding characters in the Ever After High fandom. Granted, it is a children's show and so dark and gloomy characters don't appear in canon too often either, but I still like Damaris nonetheless!

Some things I'd like to see are relationships, just to expand on her character. Also more EAH-lingo, to give it that EAH "magical" look. I'd also love to see some more quotes from her, because I noticed you mention she could get pretty snarky, and I just love snarky characters~ Oh, and I'm wondering how she feels about the Royal vs Rebel conflict, and why she chooses to be a Royal when she even states that she shows her opinion through rebellions.

Oh, also you get bonus points for POC OC~ If there's anything that Ever After High, both the fandom and canon, are lacking, it's representation. So I'd also like to add that you always add in your character's romantic and sexual preferences C:

So, I think you've got on your hands two very well-written OC's. I'd just try to fit them more into EAH's universe by added little tidbits of EAH lingo here and there. It's just a minor thing, maybe no one will even notice, but it'll still be nice to see~

And if you need any more advice or help, just let me know!