Board Thread:Fun and Games/@comment-26208189-20150524005422/@comment-25936606-20150524215236

Okay, Vin, so my favorite OC of yours so far is Bellerina. I’ll admit, I’m kind of biased because her shy personality reminds me of myself, but she is very well developed, as well. It’s great to see fairytales with Happily Never Afters who are Royals once in a while– it interests others to discover exactly why they’re okay with a bad ending. And yet, she has realistic desires and “side effects” in her personality because of her destiny (e.g. her pessimistic attitude). I think you do well in coming up with the accurate effects on a character from such things.

Now criticism – ah, I mean critiquing. . . . I do feel that her bio focuses more on her negativity and determination to follow destiny than anything, and I would suggest adding another dimension to her personality, or expanding further on what you already have, like how she is a hopeless romantic. And some advice for roleplaying: as a shy person myself, I find that I personally both hate and enjoy contact with others. It’s daunting when you don’t know how to respond, and after much experience with social failures, you start to become more afraid of making mistakes. Yet, at the same time, there’s still the human desire to be around other people. Of course, not everyone’s the same, but my suggestion is merely to, if you haven't already, go into detail as to her motivation for why she isn’t fond of socializing, even if it's only for you to know.

I’m also curious, what does she do when her weak heart forces her to stop dancing? Is she prone to continue even when she should stop, or is she wise enough to take a break when she needs to? I hope this helps, and I can’t wait to see Bellerina develop more!

And to the next Driver, I would like to be critiqued on China Dish. I’m sure she needs work, I just don’t know what areas in specifically. Be as harsh as you like – I appreciate the help!