User blog:ArtemisDonut/Is It Good or Nah?

I've been writing my own fairytales and really want you guys to critique it Please no flames, this is my first time trying it out:

The Princess and the Beggar

There once was a princess who was by far the loveliest any suitor had seen. She had long hair the color of golden flame, eyes greener than the sea and skin without a blemish. She was intelligent, caring, and strong.

Alas, she was stubborn as a mule and only wished to go on in life in the way she wished.

One day, the very day before her fifteenth birthday, the king came dressed in his fine robes and directed her to go wash up, for a suitor was coming, and they wished to marry her off.

“Well I certainly can’t do that!” The princess scoffed and the king asked why.

“Well, what if perhaps I didn’t wish to marry him?” And so she dressed in less fine clothes and went to work in the royal kitchen.

Several months later, there was a royal banquet. The head cook told her to bring the roast pig to the queen.

“Well I certainly can’t do that!” The princess scoffed and the cook asked her why.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">“Well, what if perhaps I didn’t wish to bring my mother her meal?” And so she dressed in common clothes and went to work for a farmer.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">Several months later, it was a festival. The farmer told her to take a day off.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">“Well I certainly can’t do that!” The princess scoffed and the farmer asked her why.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">“Well, what if perhaps I didn’t wish to go to the festival?” And so she dressed in rags and went about to travel.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">Several months later, she came about a beggar. “Please, spare a gold coin for a beggar?”

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">“Well I certainly can’t do that!” The princess scoffed and the beggar asked her why.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">“Well, what if perhaps I didn’t wish to spare a gold coin?” And before she could leave, the beggar replied, to her surprise.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">“Then come by when you feel like sparing me a gold coin!” He shouted and waved to her as she left.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">Several months later, she returned and found the beggar. She gave him a gold coin and told him she was a princess and would marry him.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">“Well, I certainly can’t do that!” The beggar scoffed and the princess asked him why.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">“Well, what if perhaps I didn’t wish to marry a princess?” He pointed out and the princess agreed that it was good thinking.

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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:12.0pt;line-height:115%;font-family: "BookmanOldStyle","serif"">And so, the two of them lived out the rest of their lives as friends and however they pleased.

So, what do you think?