User blog comment:EtherealNyx/Advice With Nyx *OPEN NOW*/@comment-26890640-20150830152317/@comment-27235572-20150830162002

Ok, I found both of them, thanks for the links!

I'm going to start with Montana. I think you've given her a nice personality so far, but you need details! (Details is my motto for everyone, BTW.) You need to prove an accurate and believable motivation for someone's actions, because everyone works on motivation.

She's rude.... But, how? Is she rude to everyone or just people that cross her? Is she purposely rude or is it just an indirect, more painfully honest type of thing?

She's angry. Again, how? Does she get angry all the time or is it based on things that anger her about life? Who does she get angry at? How does she relieve and express her anger? She's tough in what manner? Does she eat nails for breakfast without milk? Can she handle bad situations with ease? Elaboration is key!

How is she nice? How does she treat her friends? Is she rude to them too? Details, details and more details. Her love of reading and fairy tales... Is the reason she's so rude because she envies other stories??? Again, I need more elaboration here.

Finally, she exaggerates stuff. She actually believes the exaggerations? Why? Is she delusional? Does she like fooling people with tall tales?

Finally, why do Berg and her never speak? Do they have a dark past? What caused the animosity?

On to An!

Timidity and being talkative do not mix well, I'm afraid. You'll have to choose between them. If she is timid, is she lonely? Does she worry about how other people view her and then just avoids them?

If she is talkative, is she a social butterfly? Does she just like conversing with people? Is she a gossip? Does she talk to people to help them through their problems? Does she get in trouble for talking too much?

How does she express her anger? Again, what causes it and all? Is she the type to curse and is she the type to lecture a person who bothers her? I need elaboration.

Just give these in mind and try to develop her more than just a few words.