User blog comment:Vinnnn/Character Critiques, Tips, and Hints/@comment-26445347-20150528080946/@comment-33209858-20150528090848

Hello there! I'm always happy to help~

I really like the idea of the daughter of the Knave of Hearts. It's unique and I'm a huge fan of Wonderlandians! For names, literally the first thing that came to my mind was "Knavery" or even just "Avery" would work too. Or, you could go for having a heart-based first name instead of last, a name like Hartley works well. For last names, Knave, Knaveson, Hearts, or Hart sound more generic but will get the point across~ Personally, I like the names Hartley Knave and Knavery Hearts very much (although the surname 'Hearts' is also Lizzie's, I imagine that a few last names in Ever After are used for plenty of characters, like how Beauty is a common last name as well as Charming and Queen). And if you do end up choosing Knavery Hearts as her name, you could also add in 'O' for her middle name so that it's Knavery O. Hearts (get it? knave(ry) o(f) hearts. oh man. i should leave the puns to zem)

In the original tale of Alice's Adventures in Wonderland, the Knave is a minor role. He's on trial for supposedly stealing the Queen of Hearts' tarts, although we never do quite find out if he was innocent or not. So perhaps her personality could be very mischievious, a bit of a hoodlum and enjoys messing with people. Hex, you could even make her kleptomaniac for an interesting flaw. Maybe she's a bit peeved that her role in her tale is so minor, and so she acts out in order to get attention.

Or, you could go in the opposite direction with her personality. Supposing that the Knave really was innocent, maybe you could make his daughter aboslutely and hilariously terrified of Lizzie because of the whole trial thing in their destiny. Maybe she's so softspoken that all these rumors get started about her (like a rumor of her stealing Lizzie's tarts, just for an allusion to the original tale). You could make her timid and have a huge sweet tooth (a nod to "stealing" tarts). Also, since she's from Wonderland, she'd naturally be a little bit on the madder side of things.

As for appearance, I think black, red and white would be a good color scheme to work with. Why? Because black, red and white are the most common colors associated with cards, and that's exactly what the Knave of Hearts is. So perhaps she has white hair with red and black streaks. In her design you could throw in plenty of card suits like hearts, diamonds, clubs, and spades. Maybe the bodice of her dress is heart-shaped and the skirt of her dress looks similar to a club suit (that way she looks like a walking card~). And since she's a Wonderlandian, I'd also suggest giving her all sorts of crazy, even mismatching patterns, so that she looks very wondrous. My favorite prints for Wonderlandians are stripes (vertical or horizontal), zigzags, spots, and checker patterns.

And now, onto Raelyn! There's not much on her page, but I am curious as to why her quote is a Bo Burnham song. Firstly, maybe you could EAH-ify it, so that the lingo fits more in the world of Ever After. Also, under the quote her name is misspelled as 'Raylyn' so you might want to change that~

Speaking of names, perhaps you could explain why you chose that name for that character, preferrably in the Notes section of her page when you get to it. It's not a huge deal, I'm just curious as to why her name is Raelyn Rebenok, as it just seems like a regular person's name and not much of a magical or punny name like most Ever After High characters are (like Apple White or Cedar Wood).

I do like the fact that she wears pants - It's definitely something that you don't see in canon or even in the fandom. It's a nice touch and it suggests something about her personality - That she's a "tomboy" so just by having a picture of her it's already conveying her personality, which is always a good thing!

I think her "Secret Heart's Desire" is a little long. Maybe you could shorten it just a little? Being short, sweet and to the point is a pretty good thing - Especially when it comes to the little infobox stuff, so that it doesn't take up the whole page. Perhaps instead of writing all that, you could put something like "I don't want a Happily Never After. I'm spelltacular with nursery rhymes [kids], so wouldn't that fit my destiny better than dying in The End?" See? It's short, sweet, to the point and has a pinch of Ever After High lingo in it~

My tip to you is trying to EAH-ify your OC as much as you can - That way they seem more like a real Ever After High canon character. When I write my OCs, I always ask myself "Is this something you would see in Ever After High?" if the answer is yes, then continue! If the answer is no, maybe you should reconsider (trust me, I've done plenty of reconsidering in the short time I've been on the wiki ^^"). Also, I expand my characters the most when I ask myself "why" they act a certain way - For example, my OC Valiant Armor is awkward around other people because she was raised in a very sheltered environment. Finding out why your character acts a certain way is a great tip to expanding their character in general, and it also helps with writing their backstory as well as their hobbies, interests, and even their pet peeves!

Overall, I think Raelyn has a lot of potential! And I can't wait to see how you start expanding on her character and adding more to her page!

Hopefully I helped in some way, shape or form. And if you need any more help, don't be afraid to ask~