User blog comment:Vinnnn/Character Critiques, Tips, and Hints/@comment-108.28.248.223-20150531192031/@comment-33209858-20150602075327

Phew, that's a lot of characters to review, but I'm always here to help! However, since that is a lot of characters, I'm going to more or less do a general over view of them and then give you some ideas or advice for individual characters - That way, it's just easier for the both of us!

I like Charming OCs, mainly because they're so flexible. They don't have a set destiny, which can either be their saving grace or downfall. Overall, I like the idea of your characters. I like how they each have their own different set of personalities, rather than being exact clones of each other. However, one thing that I'd like to point out is that most Charmings, when coming from the same line of a family, all have adjective names that can with a certain letter. For example, we know there's Daring, Dexterous, and Darling Charming with their D letter theme, and they have grandparents (Auspicious and Alluring) that have an A letter theme. I believe there's also a G letter themed Charming line and a C. That's my biggest advice to you is to perhaps rename your characters so they fit that canon.

For all of them, some things I'd like to see: Perhaps more personality traits. I know Kindness is meant to be kind, and Grace is meant to be graceful but isn't there more to their characters? Perhaps Kindness' kindness could also be used as a flaw against her (ie. she can't say no because she doesn't want to hurt someone's else etc.) or maybe she has a certain pet peeve which makes her not so kind. Oh, and why does she have so many pets? I feel like that might be against the rules of the school to have all these pets live in her dorm. Perhaps she has one real pet, but other animals are just attracted to her? That way, it makes more sense.

For their infoboxes, I'd say perhaps expand on what subjects they like and don't like - why do they like and dislike them? And I can't say I'm a huge fan of having dialogue in the infobox, as it more or less takes up space and I feel like the infobox is meant to be the thoughts of only one character (My thoughts about the infobox expand to the rest of your Charming OCs, as well since they all seem to have dialogue in them somewhere).

Oh, and one last thing: Are they supposed to have overlapping middle names? Because I noticed that Brightness' middle name is Kindness, but isn't that her sister's name? And then Belle's middle name is Grace as well, but her sister's name is Grace. That just sort of confused me a little~

Overall, I don't think they're terrible but they could use a little work here and there. I'd say expand upon their characters more. Don't be afraid to give them more traits than what their names say about them. Hex, you could even flip the script and make them the opposite of their name (ie. make Grace really clumsy or Kindness really mean). Quirks and habits are also really fun to give to characters, and it makes them so much more relatable as well. I think these quintuplets have plenty of potential, and I can't wait to see more about them! Hopefully I helped and if you need any more advice, don't be afraid to ask~