User blog comment:EtherealNyx/Advice With Nyx *OPEN NOW*/@comment-3991308-20150902013751/@comment-27235572-20150905021048

First off, I find the intro to be very humorous and interesting, but you should probably change "Rebel" to "Rebels". Small observation from a seasoned nitpicker.

I'd like to see his info box filled out, so that I can get a small, but brief judge on his character before actually reading the profile XD Info boxes really help me figure out how a character basically ticks without actually reading the profile just yet.

On to the personality! I spotted some inconsistencies like how he is charming, but has no filter between his brain and his mouth. By my standards and by fairy tale ones, that's not very charming at all.

Though, I might be evaluating this the wrong way. Perhaps, he is just intelligent and sweet enough to not really think rude things to say to people. Rather, he thinks in a charming and suave way, thus he is. Can I get some clarification here?

I like the fact that everything he is is basically a lie, though. Ultimately, it disregards everything about him and makes you wonder if you'll ever see the real him. I enjoy that he's searching for a place where he belongs: that's an admirable venture, albeit a bit close to home.

I also enjoy his mixed heritage and would like to see a bit more of it. How does it affect him? And, how is it shown in his appearance? Also, maybe some motivation as to why he dyes his hair? Just a bit curious to see this section filled out more.

I also like seeing his family section. His parents interest me and I would love to see more of them and how they have influenced his life and his personality. Do they even know the real him?

I want to see more on the Bathilda front, but I feel Mira's part is perfect and fun and a good way to start a friendship.

I would like to see the other sections fleshed out, but overall, a very nice job! Kudos to you!